Revising Observing & Noticing

Remember those poems we wrote? The ones about the Kowhai Pods & the walnuts? We identified the NOUNS and then we ACTIVATED them by making them do something.

In your memoir writing (when you are describing anything) try an make your nouns do something.

Here's an example

The Old Alley

Soaked papers cling to aged stone

Dustbin lids rock to and fro in the light wind

milk cartons, beer bottles and newspapers

squeeze through holed, rusty and overloaded bins.

Broken drainpipes hang from decaying and depressing walls,

thieving rats raid abandoned houses.